This course is designed for students taking high school English. Our class will explore ideas, concepts, and themes within the realm of literature and students will be afforded the opportunity to consume ideas, produce thoughts, and engage in personalized, academic learning. This course requires reading, writing, speaking, listening, and the ability to think independently.
Tuesday, January 31, 2012
BENCHMARK - PERSUASIVE ESSAY - SCHOOL SPORTS *extra credit!
If you would like to receive some EXTRA CREDIT for your awesome persuasive essays (recently completed for the benchmark assessment), then please post your Gdoc link to the work in the comment box. If you do not know what I am talking about, then it's probably best to come see me with questions. And remember, extra credit is only icing on the cake... the cake is what fills you up. Nice metaphor, huh?! Yeeeaaah... I knew you'd like that!
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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bU3qR43thhk9kYG7QLntR10gBhDn8ZIUWnxY5ALaHZo/edit
ReplyDeleteFor your openning paragraph, you can spell check some of your spelling. And a good thing i liked was that you came out with good questionsdand a resonable hook.
DeleteFor paragraph two, you need to indent and some better vocabulary would make your paragraph stronger and your reson stronger as well.It also needs to have more sentences to a paragraph. 5 would be plenty.
For paragraph three, you need more puncuation and sentencde structure. I liked the topic you were using for this paragraph.
For paragraph four, i like your ideas for this paragraph. This made your opinion much more clear and made your essay stronger. Work on your sentence structure.
For paragraph five, your sentences were vague. I like your ending but by harm wat do you mean???
Paragraph 1- I think your introduction to your essay was really good but you messed up on some words. But i think that your topic was amazing.
DeleteParagraph 2- I think that when you were talking about that the new laws will make people stop using the internet. Also I like how you were talking about when people do not know where to go when they do not have maps.
But I do not like how the shipping companys will not deliver there packages.
Paragraph 3- I ran out of time I would like to comment more but the bell is going to ring.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1v8Pf_DqUq6CXu26W3JSpKciGge4CFmGz8lRkc8iMbRg/edit
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